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    dots Submission Name: I (dont) Love Youdots

    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI (dont) Love Youdots

    Each time that you tell me
    The sound just tears me up
    Slowly ripping my insides
    And yet I havenít had enough
    I find hope to still hold onto.
    It cuts me like a knife.
    I let the blood flow freely
    Iím holding onto life.
    I just canít breathe without you.
    You breathe into me.
    I canít take the truth surrounding
    and Iím drowning in this sea.
    It kills me but sustains me
    So continue what you do.
    A lie has never meant as much
    as me lying next to you.

    Submitted on 2006-04-07 11:18:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i hope you don't get insulted, but i think this is cute. it made me say 'aww...' but not in a sad way.

    i like the flow from bad into good; like... ehhh... it's times like these that i wish i could explain myself properly. the beginning is all sad and negative and the end is sorta happy. for some strange reason i felt like this was happy...i know weird, right? i mean, wait, maybe not happy, no happy isn't the word, i think i'm goin' for positive. yeah, that seems right. problem sloved.

    sorry u had to read all that... my mind is a weird place and it sort of just seeped right in to this.

    "A lie has never meant as much
    as me lying next to you." = my favorite part.
    it's the part that made me say aww.

    good stuff samm.
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      Samm, I'm so sad.
    If I wasn't medicated, I would be crying uncontrollably.
    (Really, when I dont pop pills, I'm a loose cannon. I didnt take any yesterday, and I looked at the words "Theres ten thousand reasons to survive, but you only needed one to die" on my wall, and I cried for the next half hour. See how sensitive I can be? lol It's rediculous.)

    Anywho, back to my comment...

    "This hope that I hold on to,
    cuts my hand like a knife."

    I dont know why, but that made my hand feel all weird and tingly. I pictured the knife... and the bleeding... and it was really disturbing (but in a good way).

    "It kills me and keeps me going"

    That part reminded me of a song that says, "I like what you put me through, cause I feel almost alive." I like it. (I have a song for almost everything, and I feel compelled to share. You know how I do.)

    And my most favorite part ever is the end:
    "A lie has never meant as much
    as me lying next to you."

    How creative is that?!? I love it.
    Oooo you're good.

    The whole thing is fabulous. I agree with the last commentor who said that it's "drenched in emotion." It's gorgeous in every way.

    I am your biggest fan ever. Really. I'm like a brick house.

    ...what? I dont know what that means. lol Byee Samm

    Very beautifully done

    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa.... this is like... drenched in emotion! it's flowing out of everyword and i'm swallowed up in it all!!!... and the message of lost love is as clear as day... it's like opening a door that leads to the bottom of the ocean. YOu don't know what lies behind it, but you open it up and it completely engulfs you... i want to see more of this out of you... Keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]

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