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    dots Submission Name: a school daydots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       hahah umm well school what do you think


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    dotsa school daydots
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    I sit in class and just write
    But this school is really starting to bite
    Same thing every single day
    The teachers with nothing new to say
    Kids waiting for that bell to ring
    It's late because the principle thinks he is a king
    But you see it just sends us to another class
    To once again sit on our ass
    With more homework or a test
    Plus having the teachers saying its all for the best
    Half way though the day
    Lunch is here we hang out and play
    Took so long to get here but gone so fast
    I just wish today wouldn't last
    The lunch bell rings again
    Back to class that bell sends
    Three more hours to go
    I didn't think any day could go this slow
    Another teacher preaching life to me
    But I know about life well enough you see
    Five minutes till the bell
    Kids run to the door like bats out of hell
    Every day is exactly the same
    And every one is to blame
    The final hour arrives
    But still wishing we weren't alive
    Silence fills the room
    Over the keyboards fingers zoom
    A short time later the last bell did ring
    Even though its only really a ding
    Get on the buses then im free
    That is a school day in my eyes you see




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      wow, that is too true, the only class i like right now is english (poetry) and Bus. Tech (all we do is get on the internet) besides that , in a class like Spanish II, all i do is wait for the bell cause the lady won't let me sleep, with her fake accent. But enough about me. I think that your format was a little off as you get toward the middle. Well, that's all i see wrong.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      haha this was somewhat ammusing for me and I can't pinpoint why- but it's very true. I have only learned 3 things this whole year and in most of my classes I have given up listening alltogether a few months ago. I liked this alot becuz I don't think that I've read a write about school, if I did it isn't standing out in my mind, so good originality;). The flow was good except for a few places that it seemed kinda forced but I think as long as you get your point across then rhyme isn't that important.....no one criticizes free flows for NOT having a flow. great write! keep writing,
    -jess
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Take it from someone who's not too old yet; School may be boring but it's better than work. I didn't do much work in school, but it's a great place to socialize. And whether you learn anything or not, you need that diploma for a lot of things.
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Jose Burgerbun | [ Reply to This ]


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