Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

All of the anothers


Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51 /52 /39
Words: 430
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1372
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 2217



Description:


These poems are looking at all of the daily anothers that we all have in our lifes .
and this is what came about
hope you like it


All of the anothers



All of the Anothers parts one and two

Another act inthis play called life your part ending with tradgity
Another chance at peace
Another chance to prove our devotion to our chossen path
Another sceen in this act of life
Another score to our song that we sing through out life
Another try at living an uneventful life
so many anothers in our lives
Another life waisted away by youths uncontroled flow
Another way to find my life
Another love gained Another one lost
Another passing year
Another challange yet to pass
many times we don't see our anothers we just look for our firsts and our lasts we just over look our anothers
Another death for me to die
Another addiction
Another stage to sing my song
Another love reborn from the ashes
Another night I lie awake .....
All of the anothers part # 2
No more anothers

Another night I lie awake
my sences fighting for control
my body feels like it is on fire
my nerves are shot
may be that is why i waz told not to do crack
it feels like I am high but I know that i am not because i am still alive
Another dissisioin that I must make about adding more to my "plate"
I just need to get away for awhile but I am trapped in this hell for all eternity . Even when I die i 'll stay here cuz this life i am living is hell
Another time I look for a way out and suicide seems like my only way to get away but why you might ask do you think that it will benifit you
Another nod as I say yes it would you give up on me and I see my only way left open to me now
Another try but this time I die and you start to cry you think what if I would have given him another chance to as kfor help maybe he'd still be alive today
Another time , Another place another night
another chance Another life snuffed out by suicied
Another statistic is what I 've become
Another bare branch on my family tree always and forever dead
the end




Submitted on 2006-04-07 13:43:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  This was great. And I just kinda bashed a poem of yours for the repitition but it totally works here.

it feels like I am high but I know that i am not because i am still alive


I don't know why but this line struck out at me.
Another statistic is what I 've become

And I like this one because it is good that you realize that you aren't the only one who is suicidal, too many venters make that misconception. I like this piece a lot.
| Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



98283