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    dots Submission Name: All of the anothersdots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 430
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       These poems are looking at all of the daily anothers that we all have in our lifes .
    and this is what came about
    hope you like it


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    All of the Anothers parts one and two

    Another act inthis play called life your part ending with tradgity
    Another chance at peace
    Another chance to prove our devotion to our chossen path
    Another sceen in this act of life
    Another score to our song that we sing through out life
    Another try at living an uneventful life
    so many anothers in our lives
    Another life waisted away by youths uncontroled flow
    Another way to find my life
    Another love gained Another one lost
    Another passing year
    Another challange yet to pass
    many times we don't see our anothers we just look for our firsts and our lasts we just over look our anothers
    Another death for me to die
    Another addiction
    Another stage to sing my song
    Another love reborn from the ashes
    Another night I lie awake .....
    All of the anothers part # 2
    No more anothers

    Another night I lie awake
    my sences fighting for control
    my body feels like it is on fire
    my nerves are shot
    may be that is why i waz told not to do crack
    it feels like I am high but I know that i am not because i am still alive
    Another dissisioin that I must make about adding more to my "plate"
    I just need to get away for awhile but I am trapped in this hell for all eternity . Even when I die i 'll stay here cuz this life i am living is hell
    Another time I look for a way out and suicide seems like my only way to get away but why you might ask do you think that it will benifit you
    Another nod as I say yes it would you give up on me and I see my only way left open to me now
    Another try but this time I die and you start to cry you think what if I would have given him another chance to as kfor help maybe he'd still be alive today
    Another time , Another place another night
    another chance Another life snuffed out by suicied
    Another statistic is what I 've become
    Another bare branch on my family tree always and forever dead
    the end




    Submitted on 2006-04-07 13:43:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great. And I just kinda bashed a poem of yours for the repitition but it totally works here.

    it feels like I am high but I know that i am not because i am still alive


    I don't know why but this line struck out at me.
    Another statistic is what I 've become

    And I like this one because it is good that you realize that you aren't the only one who is suicidal, too many venters make that misconception. I like this piece a lot.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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