Fear to feel, Feel to fear -------------------------------------------
I feel a little too much
my feelings have become fear
so paranoid..
I feel for that little kid
walking across the street
I feel for that overly emotional person that cuts
I feel for the hater who just hates and hates
I fear for the old lady who looks lost
must help...
life is so fragile
it withers
it fades
and frail
I witness
death is closer upon every step
I fear for that friendless child
I fear for that drunk dude sitting on the street
his blue eyes say it all...
I feel for all those 13 year olds
who are going through shit
I fear for the earth as I step upon it
Oversensitive... must help..
I feel a shadow towering above me
watching me closely.. I wonder...
This fear and paranoia have got to stop
before I go absolutly insane
locked behind my crumbling wall...
That was pretty deep. And really emotional. Sometimes your emotions can get the best of you and make you feel overwhelmed. It was awesome. I like your poems alot.
I think you have had some rough times of your own to have such emotional sensitivity. Emotion, you may already know, is your greatest tool. As poets, it's our job to channel our emotions into others through words. A great poet can bring tears to the eyes of a stranger with a single line. Wether those be tears of joy or of sadness, you must decide.
Poets feel too much (perhaps I shouldn't say 'too' perhaps instead I should say 'more' since feeling isn't bad...) Anyway, we see more than the average person, and it affects us tenfold. I have found myself in tears at the grocery store looking at a kid and thinking "oh... you poor thing... there is nothing left for you but to grow up (which is dreadful)" I've cried over old people and people that look totally normal aside from a twinge of torment somewhere in their eyes... that's really what this poem brought to mind for me - the way things overly compell me/us. You stated it beautifully. On one hand, I think some statements could be more creative or descriptive, but at the same time I think your to-the-point style (as opposed to being wordy and over-done) gives each piece charm and a true to life voice. So whatever? I don't know anything, really. I did enjoy this, though (and I would tell you if I didn't) Jessica
It is a little hard for me to relate to this one. Though it kinda makes you really stop and think about those things that we say really doesn't bother us but in reality they really do and how much pain we experience from the state of others. Even though there is usually nothing we can do about it. The flow was very nice. Good job.
I really did enjoy reading this piece and I also agree maybe this could be a great song would love to hear some music put to these words, Your style of writing is different than what I am use to writing and reading will be checking out some more of your work, hope you will enjoy some of my work also catch you later this one is just awesome have to add it to my favs..
shyt man this was real. I know what you feal, it sux ass. at least you know your not narsacisstic. I might try some synonyms and perhaps a slight awray of structure, none the less this was true, and empathy can be a real [censored] sometimes.
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO DEEEEP WOW I LIKE IT LOL i am hyper as [censored] man i like the poem llolololoolololololololo man this has to be really long for it to except it for me lolololololololooloo
first of all I love the title...it's very eye catching. i also really like the formatting on this...it's a bit scattered, kind of like this emotional overload you seem to be having... it's really easy to see the ugly things in life, but if you give yourself a chance, you could also see the beauty in it...like the innocent laugh of a child that doesnt know what ugliness is... etc...you get my drift...
anyway, thanks for sharing, and don't be afraid to feel everything, not just fear or realization of ugliness
Wow! This is deep. While reading this piece I could honestly see all those kinds of people in my mind. I could feel the cut, and the hate and I had that feeling that I was lost. I like this a lot. It's goin' on my favs!
Hey! This is pretty good, it would be a brilliant song. maybe you should consider revising it and adding some music to it. I think some head-banging is in order. Freaking mad write! i love it. Take care *dani
I can see you really examined yourself and your surroundings before and while you were writing this. I especially like "his blue eyes say it all...", it is a very good image. A good poem. Thanks for commenting on 'A Drop'!
i don't feel an over all direction but i can understand feeling like you got the world on your shoulders there was one stanza that purely got me though it was life is so fragile it withers it fades and frail I witness death is closer upon every step That deffinately got me and your message is clear
I fear for that friendless child I fear for that drunk dude sitting on the street his blue eyes say it all... I feel for all those 13 year olds who are going through [censored] I fear for the earth as I step upon it
^ That was def. my fave part. It seemed as though I fit right in. You put so much imagery into this piece. It is one of your best. I wish I had thought of it first! lol . . . j/k
Misspelling (crumbaling) intentional? Shifting pacing and pauses via punctuation and enjambment gives it a kind of 'scattered mind' type of feel which works very well with the subject matter. Brings back memories of some of the stuff I saw on the streets of Phoenix.
Submission Name: Fear to feel, Feel to fear
