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    dots Submission Name: Monster's Night Outdots

    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The story of what monsters do once a year... hoping is funny somehow

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    dotsMonster's Night Outdots

    He is coming quickly,
    you better run and hide,
    From Transylvania itself,
    Comes the Count of the dark night,
    So be careful and beware,
    because tonight Dracula strives.
    Monster's Night Out
    Only shows in the full moon,
    halfway man halfway a wolf,
    His howl will make you wonder who,
    better run for he comes for you,
    from clearly deep in the woods,
    Its the Wolfman.
    Monster's Night Out
    He is a work of imagination,
    A machine of science and nature,
    The undead forever lives and never dies,
    Strong and tall and a bit deformed,
    He hates societies across the world,
    Big monster created by Dr. Frankenstein
    Monster's Night Out
    They meet at Transylvania castle,
    Avoided the traffic's hassle,
    Ran all the way from across the world for this one night,
    Fought off the weather with all their might,
    Just to see if they just might,
    Win the most important fight in Monsters night out.
    So they all sit at the table,
    Stack the cards, shuffle, and serve them,
    Sending Jacks, Queens, Kings, and Aces all around,
    Mighty howls that shake the ground,
    Growls and screams that scare the town,
    Playing poker is the great Monster's Night Out.

    Submitted on 2006-04-08 01:01:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interestingly put. Somehow, the castle is a perfect hanging out spot. No one will dare to come in there i am for sure unless i am looking for something that i might regret or i just want to be part of the crew. All these fictionous stories all put together to assemble at a male famous game....poker...

    although it is interestingly put and it seems that you've thought about everything you could of wrote, maybe try using another approach towards this poem. Somehow, i just get the idea of monster's night out, monster night out, monsters night night....all i hear are the types of monsters and all coming to this night out (i'm thinking of my b/f going and hang out with his male friends right now...very masculine)....maybe try using a sequence or arranging your thoughts as to how these monsters have come about together....maybe even saying what they thought throughout the day....i'm sure guys think about what their gonna do and what they're gonna say to their male friends the same day before they go to reach them. I don't know....But think beyond the obvious.

    In a way, it was funny. Made me compare the reality with the non real characters....It was very interesting the way you have written this piece and for that i applaud you for a well done job.

    Anyhow, do take care until we meet again.
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      I did find this enjoyable, bit funny. I am not sure if you noticed it but there is a day when all the monsters go out and hunt for food, and scare the people away... that day is Halloween.

    I think a good idea would be spacing out this poem, not that I mind too much but it would look nicer if you devided this into a few stanzas. I am just wandering could this be turned into a song...

    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by WriterX | [ Reply to This ]

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