Incredible...there are few who can go through life without showing any emotion...as u already know I cracked...I let my guard down and now look at me.But it was a great write,keep it up.
I think I understand the poem is about how eyes hide feelings. i like it very much. i think you should keep up the writting. i have to find out how many more you wrote and go look at those. Im going to add this to my favorite list.
heyy. ah yes i understand what the poem is about!...how eyes can show/hide soo many feelings. *thumbs up* but at times the lines don't seem to fit right--> {Eyes hide pain; Are those who hide the tears.} ermm also theres like a random verse that only has 3 lines, and the rest have 4. o and some verses rhyme... some don't... its a bit of a mix but yeh well dun :) XxX
nice, not bad, good emotion, the sentance i am currently writing is because my initial critique was a silly one liner and i ma now attepting to juts get this damn thing over with. Thankyou for your time spent needlessly reading this, i did however enjoy reading your poem, PCe
I like it-deep emotion. I would say that the paragraph that goes:
Eyes hide pain Are those who hide the tears Burning inside And hiding everything I would change hiding in the last line to suppressing because you already use hide 2 lines above. Just a thought, it was good keep writing!!
And Now...this beautiful poem will be magically put on my favorites list....TADA!!!!!!!!!.....lol anyways. This poem is very good. Sooner or later people run out of good words to use to describe beautiful. It suxxxx!!! Anyways, great, Beautiful,and good poem.
Submission Name: Eyes That Smile
