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    dots Submission Name: Vocal Tearsdots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 712
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1546



    Description:
       i wrote it yesterday
    yeah
    you don't need to hear the detials

    you know
    its just teenage stuff


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    i want to scream,
    as loudest as i can,
    is this all a dream?
    if it is.. than why can i hear my laugh?
    if it is... why can i feel your hand

    i'm so delicate, crying inside like a newborn baby,
    learning how to walk, learning how to love again.
    i'm a lost child in this reality,
    of what is stuck inside deep in my head

    in my puddle of confusion
    trying to figure out if you are true
    or is this all dream that feels so much like reality
    and i wanna do to find out the answer is scream
    knowing i will find out when my heart is broken once Again


    wondering if i'll ever get that kiss
    let it be my first one on my lips
    that i have ever felt....
    Vulnerable... so sad.. so delicate

    like a newborn baby
    crying for its mother to hold on
    and care for...

    like me
    lost and looking for something to hold on
    and be cared for...

    screaming so loud
    holding on to the sound
    grabbing onto nothing
    but a delicate song
    of crying vocal tears

    i know i would kill for the truth
    cus i like you
    (oh so much)
    but do you like me the same
    i'm so afraid
    to find out the truth, so much painfull shame
    cus its all just a dream
    where it feels allot like reality
    and i can hear you laugh
    and feel your hand





    Submitted on 2006-04-08 12:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a deep write
    My Friend you are still young True Love will come in the Future
    What you may perceive as true love you will deal with many times in your youth but True Love comes with age
    I enjoyed reading this
    You definately have talent
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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