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    dots Submission Name: The Value of Our Livesdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 721
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    Description:
       This was an on the fly piece. I was responding to an e-mail about an Aunt that is near death. The person sending the note had questioned the "Why". This is simply what plopped onto the page as I was replying to the note. It seemed important enough to share.


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    dotsThe Value of Our Livesdots
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    The value of our lives,
    the ways we die,
    who's to know the meaning
    except on the other side.

    We can make them what we want
    choose the memories to measure.
    My selection is perfection
    that is found only in the love.

    I'll leave the rest to the creator.




    Submitted on 2006-04-08 12:55:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow!!! that is really a well-written piece although it is so short but so effective and powerful and I liked it so much. The question
    " why " we shall not ask as believers and it is really clear that we humans the creating of our Lord and we must not ask Him why you do that.
    And I think the eternal life is better than this one we are living, there in the Heavens everybody will enjoy the peace and the fair we lack today.
    I'm really sad for your aunt but what can do there is nothing to be done but we have all to pray for her. I will pray for her.

    yours,
    khaled.
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going to get personal here for a minute...when my grandfather died I was 13 and the biggest question of my life was "Why" and the priest told me, "God needs him for another purpose" and I was mad...what purpose could this great man have besides being there for me, it was a very large turning point for me in life...
    Time and knowledge healed this for the most part, but I want to thank you for you have put into words the feelings and it is just right.
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple, yet effective writing here. I think that it was more could be added to this and done. I'm sorry for what is happening with your aunt. I think that you summed up the mystery of why for us nicely and you left the reader with a since of realization, we will never know the whys and how we need to just leave things to God. Nice work.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfectly put Chrystine
    I live my life the very same way
    I do not look at others negativity in fact
    I cannot feel negativity I can only feel the love and all the positive energy they have
    I stay clear of those absorbed with the negative
    Excellent Job with this one
    I will be Praying for your Aunt
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This has lots of depth Chrystine and you know I love that about you, layers- I think we're all somewhat like cakes, no?

    You describe the blindness which is a part of human life and how difficult it seems at times because the other side does know and we don't. Just think about how difficult their job is..
    Are we souls evloving (ooops typo) evolving in virtual taffy pull?

    And then you hit the nail on the ego: love is something that we have and give, no other explanation suffices, at least in my mind. I think you did a great job with this, it comes from the heart and that is just right. Peace and healing to your family too.

    Nan

    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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