Description: I know it's worth crap. I wrote this when I was having major family problems. Right now I'm not depressed, but I have this hollow feeling.
Pain Over Sin -------------------------------------------
A hungry monster of rebellion
has taken me this fare.
Into the depths I never wanted to reach
I'm writing this as a consolation
I want to cry
I want to scream
I want to see my arms bleed.
All I need is pain to take me
to engulf me within it's embrace
Sins is all I've done.
Yet this one I can't do.
I refuse these dreams,
I refuse these unholy scares.
I refuse the one who caused this all.
To any god that I have rejected
please take me with you.
Put me in chains,
and make me shed blood and tears.
Torture me for eternity
so I can cast away these horrors.
I want to forget my name
I wish to drop my heritage
I will deny all pleasures
just to be taken away,
and put into blissful pain.....
This is a great write..not crap at all!...sometimes pain can help heal and fix things....the flow was really nice...depression and longing spilled from the words..i can relate to the feeling..sometimes all i want to do is suffer for what i've done..or for what other have done to me..anywho i thought this was a really really good write! so keep up the great work!!
This is a real good write This is definately not crap This write is centered around the truth that one will feel pain to start healing I believe that is true as to heal will be painful in the begining but the rewards much outweigh the downfall Stay Strong and Please stay Positive That positive energy will guide you to happiness God Bless Ron
well I don't know exactly why you thought this was crap? personally I never like my own writes, maybe ur the same way, anyway I really enjoyed this. the only thing was that it started off a bit slow and some of the flow was unnatural but your wording, and emotion was hauntingly beautiful....and your last five lines made this all the more worthwhile of a read for me. that and I love your title. keep writing, -jess