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    dots Submission Name: My Sad Lifedots
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    Author: MascaraTears69
    ASL Info:    14/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 15/11/7
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 789
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    Description:
       This was just a venting poem about my parents. Comments would be nice...


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    dotsMy Sad Lifedots
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    She doesn't understand
    He doesn't see.
    That their words hurt
    And it's killing me.

    I'm a cutter
    But they don't understand.
    When they see my scars
    They just get mad.

    Don't they understand,
    That I did this for them?
    So they would know,
    I'm forever condemed.

    I hate myself
    But no one cares.
    Not even them.
    They were never there.

    So here I am.
    Blade in hand
    I'm going to show them,
    Why I feel so bad.

    Goodbye mom.
    Goodbye dad.
    I'm dying now
    And I couldn't be more glad.




    Submitted on 2006-04-09 00:12:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was amazing very sad but wondefully written. It's understandable that parents dont get their kids sometimes and sometimes kids dont get their parents but thats one of the rules of life i guess, i know you'll grow up and your kids will have the same complaint. I really loved this though very deep and emotinal great write.

    Smiles,
    Jay.

    P.S. i am adding it to my favs.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Itís a good poem , it has your emotions but I must say it has a lack of originality as well , I mean sure itís honest ,and many people can relate to this but Iíve read like this poem in this site about a 100 time (and remember it's just my oppinion )
    but I like the third and the last stanza although
    have a nice day
    ~~drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I can say i have been there before... kinda. Most of the stanzas i can relate to. But i have come to understand the cutting is not for anyone elts but yourself. it can seem as a sweet relief while at the same time, it is really only hurting.
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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