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    dots Submission Name: Tell Me You're Forgottendots
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    Author: nosferotu_gurl
    ASL Info:    24/female/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 140/165/67
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Not to anyone,more to myself.Though also every person loved and lost..walked away or given up.No perticular meaning and dont take it personally. Kien hassen.


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    dotsTell Me You're Forgottendots
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    Are we really as forgotten, alone
    and distant as we think ourselves to be.
    Black heart to black heart,
    are you worth remembering?

    This virus feeds on broken hearts
    and dying dreams, or so it claims.
    Every case is the same,
    so misunderstood. Poor pathetic you.

    So cry your bloody tears,
    make friends with razor blades.
    Claim your independence,
    though we know you're all the same.
    You're so beautiful and unique
    just like the one before.

    Well now we're all listening,
    isn't this what you wanted?
    Someone to tell you you're okay.
    though you know it, you've known all along.
    Now tell me how you're so cold.

    You had a chance to fess up,
    now you're stuck.
    Bleeding through your eyes
    crying through your wrists,
    tell me how you're forgotten....





    Submitted on 2006-04-09 00:51:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. deep. i like this a lot. its so emotional. its so...in your face. wow. haha i lack the vocabulary to describe this. very nice job done keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by hayl | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good. i likied it. shows how u feel. right to the point. nicely done. u have some awesome word chioce also. good job. great write. keep going.
    <3kel
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this poem and the lines "Black heart to black heart, are you worth remembering? "
    I cant think of anything bad to say about it...very brutal and perfectly worded.. thanks for sharing.
    AL
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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