I don't know

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I don't know

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I don’t know What would you like to be when you’re older ? I don’t know. How can you not know ? I just don’t know. Haven’t you thought about it ? No I haven’t. Why don’t you think about it ? It’s you’re future ! Well maybe I wasn’t planning on having a future Maybe some people don’t want to live that long Some people wouldn’t mind dying young And maybe I’m one of those people ! Why don’t you answer me ? Say something ! I don’t know …

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If only I had the guts to say that to people. Tom, this is something I can relate to. My friends are always asking me what I want to be. I feel that it is too soon to decide that, and I know that my desire to become a pilot will remain a fantasy. If I tell them that I want to become so, then I am sure they will mock me. Any ways, this write highlighted that issue very well. I am going to do the same as you, and tell them what this poem is telling me. Lets pray for a world with out any silly questions. Out of 5, I'd give this a 5 Abbas

| Posted on 2006-05-21 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

i like it so much , I know it’s silly to add it to the favorites , but I am going to , I love it . nice job cheers ~~drakoniss~~

| Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]

this was way cool. the italics being the thoughtsshowing you know exactly. but just arent letting it out. as if they arent important enough to know. so why even try.

| Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]

TOM- Umm... I actucally thought this was kinda funny. I hope very much it wasn't supposed to be super serious. i feel that the unspoken reply was sarcastic and annoyed but held a grain of truth. while its not really a poem, per say, it has a flow that lets you see the conversation. Expanding would help i think but you'd have to be careful that you don't overwrite it. (geesh- Over-write, Under-write..there's just no pleasing me is there? :>) perhaps including a sardonic response to the annoying person who won't stop the questions? Not much else to critique is there? well- this was pretty good- nice work and thanks for sharing. SASHA LYNN

| Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

this was an interesting piece, because on one hand I can relate perfectly to what you're saying; yet on the other it has a strange sort of broken-flow that while not thoroughly fluid, manages to capture the sort of confusion or indecisiveness of the piece. I enjoyed this piece and thank you for sharing!!! Meow!!!

| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]

Yeah, a good idea, as most of us hear or have heard the question often enough. I think you should make use of the italics more to show exactly who is who, with your own thoughts as the ones in italics. Plus, it would look better that way. Some expansion wouldn't hurt, the one longer stanza was getting into some good stuff, but could do with more. Nicely done be happy graeme

| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

Interesting form. May be a bit short, it seemed to end so abruptly. Nonetheless I really like the idea, of that theme you wanted to create. I would've loved a bit more thoughts in the poem, since it would add much more weight to the last line. Crescendo of events may be? Either way, I encourage you to write more! Best wishes, ~Alina

| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by Ms. DejFruit | [ Reply to This ]

hmmm...i thought this was good..and yes i hate that question as well, because i also don't know what i want to be in the future..and as i save "die young and save yourself"....getting old is somewhat overated..just kidding..i don't like thinking about the future, because i'm not there yet, i like to live for today and the present..not the future because i might not be alive..this write was interesting..cool..there was one mistake though, when you wrote "Maybe some people don’t want to life that long" Instead of "Life"..i think you meant to write "Live"..but anyhow very good write, keep up the good work!! ^_^ --Lucy--

| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]

Good question, I understand it. To me it's always been like the phrase "i don't know" is to just make the conversation longer because then people ask more questions. Alina Lucky

| Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by luckyms20 | [ Reply to This ]

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