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    dots Submission Name: Let It Bleeddots
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    Author: Toxic_Rayne
    ASL Info:    18/f/a happier place
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 1314/1095/162
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1128
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLet It Bleeddots
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    I guess some can make it on their own
    Even when their world is overthrown
    But that way of life wasn't for me
    And my only resort is to let it bleed

    These twisted thorns on this sordid path
    Block my redemption, if only for my behalf
    This lonliness overwhelms me
    Until, finally, I'm succumed by misery

    Someone, block this next blow
    Before I sink unto this all-time low
    The shadow of the valley of death,
    Seems to kill me, taking away my breath

    I want to be loved, adored by fans
    I want us to die, holding hands
    But no one seems to care
    On the inside, emergency sirens blare

    Go ahead, slit my throat, like a fragile flower
    Lock my soul inside your ivory tower
    The incisions on my body are hidden so you can't see
    For the life I was given, cannot be taken without fee

    There's a knife in back,
    The wound rotted, and adorned in black
    For every day that I've known you
    Every lie about me, became true

    Everything I've done seems wrong
    Every day I live is too long
    Searching for something to feed the ache inside
    But all I've found is that Jesus lied

    The want for love is stronger than ever
    Yet, recieving it, might as well be never
    Needing to cry but unable to do so
    Signing my heart with a false X and O

    Do I just sit hear and let the pain bleed?
    Or do I find another soul for it to feed?
    When the word love itself dies
    I'll realize I'm made up of lies

    The cuts on your wrists
    Are clenching my fists
    Just wounds from the past
    Oblivious promises that never last

    I never wnated it anyway
    Save your shit for another day
    Plant the devious seed
    For all I can manage....
    Is to let it bleed...































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      alright i don't know what to say about this one! it was f.ucking awesome! and i dont know why either...it just pulled you in even though it was long and made you keep reading and had you feeling alone, but still vengeful...going on the favorites!

    ~chaos~

    ahh!!! nooo!! i have now commented all ur recent stuff...:-( now i suppose i will start on the other stuff? lol haha byeee
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm.... Interesting I guess it is just thoughts and I think its really cool oh especially

    "Go ahead, slit my throat, like a fragile flowerLock my soul inside your ivory towerThe incisions on my body are hidden so you can't seeFor the life I was given, cannot be taken without a feel"

    Fana
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good Toxic, so sorry about ur guy friend tho....I always thought it selfish to be mad at someone for cutting, but at the same time a few of my friends aren't too happy with me doing it lately either. this was really good wording/killer imagry the only thing I have to say negative is that u stole the title:P lols.
    great write.
    take care,
    ==silent==
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      O.M.G...wow.....wow....thats all I can really say right now. This was a great poem. I mean usually I dont like the whold cutting ordeal but you made me realize that, that is a way that some people cope. Its a bad addictionI know but its life I guess. My advice to you is dont let people get to you. People are going to do or what they say just for them to be doing it but as long as you know who you are and what makes you...you then your set. This was a great write keep it up girl.
    -Christina a.k.a. POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a wonderful way to express how u feel it is a very good write and shows true compassion even if it is not towards yourself good write and dont let other people get you down to much coz hey its your life and some times you've just gotta let it bleed
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
      Speechless.Some typos but to error is human,perfection impossable.Beautiful and true.Soryy if this is your reality cause I've walked this path believe it or not but my fear of death was to my denial of God..I was afraid of Hell if it existed but for it to exist meant he did exist.I'm saved now,still feel like this but alive.Good luck.^_^
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...omg..this was amazing...i can relate to it..a lot...if you ever need someone to talk to, you can come to me...i would love to help...cutting is an addiction, and not a good one...but i've been there..actually i'm still there..lol...

    "Go ahead, slit my throat, like a fragile flower
    Lock my soul inside your ivory tower
    The incisions on my body are hidden so you can't see
    For the life I was given, cannot be taken without a fee"

    I loved this stanza..for me it just stood out from the rest..it was flawless...i can relate to this stanza like hell...your imagery was beautiful..keep up the great work!! ^_^

    --Lucy--
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      holy sh!t! great poem deff. a fav. just i need to point out that "wanted" i ur last stanza is mixd up. but anyways, the intensity that tis pom creates is so suttle yet noticable it pretty much drags te reader into it. each word perfction each line a poem itself. although i havn't ben on ere in a long long time i have been keeping up with potry by going to st. pauls comunity college for poetry readings. but this poem just hits, not the heart itself but te soul of those who can comprehend with what is said. i think in te time i have been gone u have grealy excelled as a taleted writer. u were my fav. writer on this sight b4, but now u have completly grasped ahold of my mind. tank you for the wonder poem and for sharing it.

    brandon
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I love that.
    You have a fan-f*cking-tastic way of describing things.
    If I pointed out my favorite part, I'd end up copying and pasting the whole thing. There are a few lines that stuck out for me though.

    "And my only resort is to let it bleed"
    I love that. It kind of reminds me of the song by The Used that says, "Let it bleed. Take the red for what its worth." Ever hear it? I <3 them lol

    "I want us to die, holding hands"
    Thats so pretty in such a sad way.

    "Signing my heart with a false X and O"
    I love that too. You are just too creative.

    You have a lot of talent.

    Very beautifully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      that was worded awesomely. I could see the person silting your throat, I could see the black fingernails, the person searching for something that is probably gone. I could see it and visualize it. The imagery, the rhyme, passionate anger. fabulous!
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by bran_flake | [ Reply to This ]


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