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    dots Submission Name: Humming earsdots
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    Author: goveiac
    ASL Info:    30/M/Toronto
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 57/71/61
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 218
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1363



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    dotsHumming earsdots
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    The band roared onto the stage and broke into "This one's for the girls."
    Found "Ontario rhythm" and got lost in "Aching world"
    Wagging middle fingers while the stars smiled over our swarm.
    She held my hand so tight that song that these thoughts still keep me warm.

    I gotta find that go-to-guy when the winds wont carry me.
    I gotta find if loves still love when ships get in from sea.

    Echoes from the train full and dull with bass sad sounds.
    Memories of a middle refrain and jumping all around.
    Singing an old lost anthem with our hands raised up to the sky,
    Lighting up a brand new night and closing what's left behind.

    I gotta find forgiveness when my sins cant carry me.
    I gotta find if loves still love while breaking in new deeds.

    To act alone in the dark is lesser than amazing.
    To build up allegiances against the words can set the world's core blazing.
    "Yeah" the crowd sung back just slightly out of synch,
    Hands moved with just a little less reason while the puck raced down the rink.

    I gotta find forgiveness in chorus full of hope
    I gotta find if loves still love, in the lyrics that he spoke.








    Submitted on 2006-04-09 19:52:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first couple of lines did not catch me .... But, I kept reading. The last Three stanzas really stuck out more to me. For a while you rhymed and I liked how it flowed. The general setting reminded me of a bar with a good band with lyrics that make you think and scream along at the same time. the message though, I belive to be deeper. Perhaps in the 5th stanza?
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]



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