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    dots Submission Name: Let's See D. Pull This Offdots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 499
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 525
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    Description:
       In actuality, this poem is called, "Let's See Dostoyevsky Pull This Off", but unfortunately, the title spot doesn't accomodate enough letters to fit most Russian names. This is basically a summary of the classic novel Crime and Punishment, and was part of my presentation of the book for my AP English class. The pro to this poem is that after reading it, you may not really have to pick up this rather slow-going yet decent novel. This basically tells the whole story. Let me know what you think, of both the poem and the prospect of reading the book afterwards.


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    Our story is set in a poor Russian town,
    Where we follow our arrogant protagonist down
    To rehearse his first murder, a rich pawnbroker crowned
    With prestigious title: meanest old bag around.

    Raskolnikov, our “hero”, backs out, thinks he’s nuts
    To even consider the terrible crime.
    He walks into a bar, meets Semyon the drunk
    Who’s so screwed up that he actually pities the guy.

    (On a side note, Raskolnikov sucks to pronounce
    And isn’t the best word for poems by far.
    So I denounce from here that his name will be “R”.)

    So Semyon has lost all his money to booze
    Including that of his daughter, a forced prostitute,
    And the funds of his wife, who’s contracted TB,
    R. takes him home to beg for his wife’s mercy,
    And out of sympathy, gives them money.

    R. gets back home, gets a letter from Mom,
    Anouncing his sister’s engagement to this rich jerk, contrived
    by the fact that Dounia lost her job
    When her boss tries to seduce her, an all-around loser
    Unfortunately before the first sexual harrasment suit.
    And R. already can’t stand this new guy.

    Fast forward to murder, yeah, he really goes through it.
    His lack of cash and sanity drove him that way.
    (Not to mention the lack of plot-line if he chose not to do it.)
    So he’s killing the callous old pawnbroker chick
    And then (oops) her sister. (She got in the way.)

    (On a note reprise, from here to the last hundred pages or so
    Gets pretty slow, so I’ll quickly summarize.)

    R. becomes guilty,
    Investigated by Porfiry,
    Distracted a bit by some false accusations.
    The drunk dies, the fiance flies
    After R. kicks him out, and there’s some major hesistation
    On his part as far as confessing the crime.
    So for a while he goes crazy
    With the social skills of Dick Cheney
    And even briefly debates suicide.

    R. gets a fixation with the dead drunken dude’s daughter,
    Remember the prostitute mentioned before?
    He confesses to her, but check out this twist:
    Dounia’s old psycho boss, who lives right next door, listens in.

    Svig, the villian, blackmails R, and almost rapes Dounia
    Who pulls out a gun and then leaves.
    Svig, plagued with nightmares and knowing he can’t have her,
    Walks out and kills himself in the street.

    In the end, the hooker gets R. to confess.
    After, like seriously, the 10th feeble attempt.
    Then she follows him to 7 years of Siberian camp,
    And they love each other, she’s no longer a tramp.
    Though the love thing happens too fast to take seriously.

    So that’s it. In summary, the count for this piece
    Is 5 dead, 10 confession attempts, one sudden love affair,
    An arrogant protagonist, insane Russian names, and countless pulling of hair
    To force myself in getting my way through the text.
    Kidding. It wasn’t that bad, had a good moral at least.




    Submitted on 2006-04-09 22:00:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you had this poem fighting itself in a few places.
    Let me ask you, do you listen to music like eminem or hip hop or rap?
    I can occasionally feel that sort of rhythm under this piece and it starts to come through in this stanza.
    "R. becomes guilty,
    Investigated by Porfiry,
    Distracted a bit by some false accusations.
    The drunk dies, the fiance flies
    After R. kicks him out, and there’s some major hesistation
    On his part as far as confessing the crime.
    So for a while he goes crazy
    With the social skills of Dick Cheney
    And even briefly debates suicide."
    I think you could even hieghten that feeling with a few changes.
    "R. becomes guilty,
    Investigated by Porfiry,
    Distracted a bit by some false accusations.
    The (drunken man)dies,
    The fiance(e) flies
    After R. kicks him out, and some big hesistations
    On his part as far as confessing the crime.
    So for a while our (hero) goes crazy
    With the social skills of (old) Dick Cheney
    And even briefly debates suicide."

    I think rapping Dostoyevsky would be amazingly cool. Maybe you could look into it. Listen to the music.... feel it's rhythm... speak it to your self and then look at the poem again Crime and Punsihment is deffinitely the same stuff rap is made of.
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]


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