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candle light dreams

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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candle light dreams

Whispered promices.
Candle light dreams.
Humid August evenings,
and the certatinty, the conviction
that comes with youth.
When the truth
isn't made of happy ever afters,
or sweet and low moments.
A kiss wont mend the broken fenses
or pay the rent.
Tomorrow always comes
to shine florescent lights,
to show the cowebs
of whispered promices.

Submitted on 2006-04-10 11:00:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this poem and the idea that is given. Especiall the "kiss won't pay the rent" line. Which of course is very true. To many people get so wrapped up in love they forget about everything else.
| Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]

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