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Blood's After-taste

Author: diamonds_2_dust
ASL Info:    15/m/Eugene Oregon
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Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Vampire
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um... i think it explains itself...

Blood's After-taste

I never knew the taste
and the adrenaline rush
that you could get
from simply the taste of blood
The deep color,
it's so enticing
and the way you live
looks so enticing
dwelling in the night
sheltered from the pounding light

but here i am wanting more
sprawled out on the floor
blade in my hand
and i cant understand
why it leave or go away
the bitter taste is here to stay
i crave for new
maybe you
just some blood
other than my own
a new taste
a new tone's an addiction
and a turn of fate
it's blood's
bitter after-taste

Submitted on 2006-04-10 13:38:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is an interesting write
I take Blood as describing The Love
Or the High you get when others Love you
I have this same high on Life sometimes myself and most of the time there is nothing wrong with it
It is when we become impulsive and Have to have that love to survive that we become ego tistical and others can feel that negativity
Taking away all our friends and loved ones
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice... I myself like the bittersweet taste of blood, especially when it comes from a certain person, but this poem portrats quite the addiction to it. There wasn't anything wrong with the poem, it was written well, and rocked wickedly awesome.
Keep it real..

| Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by never_wanted | [ Reply to This ]

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