something new...
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this is me right now..... messed and excited and confused... RAMBLING
something new...
mind blowing confusion its a crazy crazy time i cant help but notice the look in your eyes the tension between us is thick as thick can be this undivided attention is more than i'd ever dreamed i cant wait to kiss you to be in your arms live a whole lifetime in that moment of joy my beliefs have been shattered and in a very good way i simply want you here and for me.. its something new.. |
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This sounds to me like the blossom of new love and/or infatuation...with dreams of it perhaps becoming something more...always a giddy time...enjoy!| | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ] | Hmm kindof interesting concidering the fact that you said that you basically want the person there and not to continuesly kiss or whatever like some of my friends do. It could use some colour to it and by that i mean to say that you could have used some more discription. This is probably the best line in the whole poem: "in that moment of joy" T his is because it is like basically using emotion. Next time try and strive for more of this. You have some great stuff in this but theres other things you can work on. I think it was good. Keep writing. | Patrick O_riley | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ] | |
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