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something new...


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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this is me right now..... messed and excited and confused... RAMBLING


something new...



mind blowing confusion
its a crazy crazy time
i cant help but notice
the look in your eyes

the tension between us
is thick as thick can be
this undivided attention
is more than i'd ever dreamed

i cant wait to kiss you
to be in your arms
live a whole lifetime
in that moment of joy

my beliefs have been shattered
and in a very good way
i simply want you here
and for me.. its something new..




Submitted on 2006-04-10 18:08:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This sounds to me like the blossom of new love and/or infatuation...with dreams of it perhaps becoming something more...always a giddy time...enjoy!
| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm kindof interesting concidering the fact that you said that you basically want the person there and not to continuesly kiss or whatever like some of my friends do. It could use some colour to it and by that i mean to say that you could have used some more discription. This is probably the best line in the whole poem: "in that moment of joy" T his is because it is like basically using emotion. Next time try and strive for more of this. You have some great stuff in this but theres other things you can work on. I think it was good. Keep writing.
Patrick O_riley
| Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]


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