Very clear meaning and structure but no figurative work! From me, "no figurative work" is a put-down .. but I was just thinking about the wonderful symbolic imagery in some of your other poems, so I'm thinking there's something going on here that I don't understand: you do some poems as straight as a laundry list and some others very figurative indeed! It's something that as a reader or critic, I don't need to understand but very curious all the same!
Puzzling your questions in each stanza, and trying to get the feel of this mostly untold love story, drew me into the text and made me think and feel about it, so it's a successful poem all right. But very different from (say) those high-coloured, startling doll poems? I bet that means something to you, somehow?
interesting.... I like the questions, although I don't know if the last line of each stanza is an answer?? and I would suggesting working on the rythum of it.. read it aloud and see if you catc hit.. try to make each pair of lines have the same number of syllables to mke the rhyming smoother.
thats a fun one... there is a spelling error in the first stanza, i think u meant to say true.... that was a thought to ponder... and that one line will remain with me for the rest of the day... thanks for the thoughts! jenn @>->-
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