"Watch her life Just fall apart All because of A broken heart.
Watch her give up As she takes out her blade And adds to the cuts She's already made.
One last cut Is all it takes To erase the past And erase her mistakes."
These were my fav. liners in this though i loved every part of it these were the lines that reached out to me the most. again good write (this must seem cliché to you by now lol). Keep it up i would love to read more.
This is really deep I am going to turn around the whole meaning of this poem and show you the Positive I believe this write speaks of someone who is shedding the negativity In this case you are referring to the blood as negativity and grasping on to their new life filled with the Positive I do this every single day of my life shed the old and let the positive of a new day carry me to happiness God Bless Your Friend Ron
I like your poem i think that it really has a lot of potenital... "Watch her give up As she takes out her blade And adds to the cuts She's already made" that's my favorite part... It does repeat a little in some parts it feels like you just said that but i still think that it's a really nice poem
Im sorry, but that seems as if you are just repeating every poem about cutting and suicide, until you get to the last stanza,
"She committed suicide Not wanting to end her life. But sometimes it happens when your addicted to the knife...."
I love that stanza. You seem to let yourself out and you say what your trying to say in that one stanza. Well, thats all. I saw you was a new user, so I decided to give you a comment, that and the fact that we're about the same age.
Submission Name: Regretting Suicide
