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    dots Submission Name: Stupid Girldots
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    Author: MascaraTears69
    ASL Info:    14/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 15/11/7
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 614
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 681



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       Not one of my best but I wanted to see your peoples opioions....


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    dotsStupid Girldots
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    Stupid girl,
    look what you do
    To all you love
    And the pain you put them through.

    Stupid girl
    With your dumb dreams
    Acting like the world
    Isn't as bad as it seems.

    Stupid girl
    Don't you know
    Your alone?
    And you'll always be on your own?

    Stupid girl
    Wanting to die.
    Hating your life
    And not knowing why.

    Stupid girl
    I hate you.
    But of course
    You hate yourself too.

    I'm the stupid girl
    With the stupid life.
    And I will chose to end it now,
    With this knife....




    Submitted on 2006-04-10 23:07:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really sad, comparing it to your other works that you have posted it's not the best but it was still pretty good. I think somehow we all are that "stupid girl".

    Shalom,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sad
    As I have told you in Chat you are a great person with A Heart of Gold
    Do not let the Negativity of the World bring you down
    You are much stronger then that
    Also
    Do not let evreyone create your life for you
    This is probably the biggest mistake I made as a teenager
    Grab Life by the reigns and noone can ever take that away from you
    I also believe Family is a huge Part of a Persons life
    A Mother And Father or sadly in some cases like mine just one parent will always be your best friend
    If you ever need someone to talk to or a shoulder to lean on Please know Im always here
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      It isn't that bad but it is really depressing. I don't like to be depressed. I may not be, cannot be, happy all the time but depression is something I will really try to get out of. Moments of love with lots a blaw in between are far better than a life of self loathing and destruction.
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by feather | [ Reply to This ]
      This is Good...i liked the whole stupid girl theme..i've done it before..but it hasn't been posted here yet...anywho the flow was awsome..made me want to keep on reading..the last stanza was the best i would say..you always end off your poems with such grace, and something to think about..Its very depressing and alone..and self-hatred is just horrible...and don't get down on yourself..Your a great person..and you've got reasons to live..you just need to notice and take them into your heart..(so emotional..lol)...anywho keep up the great work!! all your pieces are so lovely for me, considering i can relate!!..*rainbow hugs*

    Lucy ^_^
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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