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    dots Submission Name: You gave medots
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    Author: kandi
    ASL Info:    20/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 14/8/9
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1554
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 543



    Description:
       This poem is dedicated to my aunt and uncle.


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    dotsYou gave medots
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    You gave me the
    courage to go
    through life with
    open eyes.

    You neber let
    me think that
    I could'nt do
    anything I put
    my mind to.

    You gave me
    the courage to
    be the best that
    I could be.

    You gave me
    the strength
    to beat my
    feelings.

    You gave me
    the strenght
    to prove
    myself wrong.

    You gave me
    the courage to
    use my wings and fly.




    Submitted on 2006-04-10 23:51:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nice poem, you are lucky to have such great people guiding you through life.
    i would leave this poem as it is, but for future ones, try and express your emotions fully through your words. let the reader know exactly how you are feeling. good job!
    -kate
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by emochick13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your comment I will change that and thank you for noticing the error I didnt even noticed it. once again thank you.

    kandi
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by kandi | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a short and really sweet poem and your aunt and uncle are very lucky to have this dedicated to them. I guess after all to have you write this to them they truly deserve it. Great poem. Oh and only one mistake you might want to change "neber" to never. Just a little error I get them too. Other than that you did great I wouldnt change anything!
    -Christina aka POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]


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