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    dots Submission Name: children who diedots

    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotschildren who diedots

    Children who die are not really gone,
    But go to a place that is something like home,
    Where they sleep the deep sleep, as quiet as stone,
    Until we can join them when our lives are done.

    Children who die are not really dead,
    But just like good children tucked into bed,
    Wait the long wait while we go ahead
    Till our tales are all told and our tears are all shed.
    Children who die feel no pleasure or pain
    In the place where they wait till they see us again,
    And all of us dance in a world washed with rain
    Where the sun shines so brightly no sorrows remain

    Submitted on 2006-04-11 08:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes it is intresting I agree with ParanoidParadox that what we get from it has readers is that a parent trying to explain death to a child in a nice way to wear they dont feel scared or you know aware of the true meaning of death. It was a very good poem. It was something different form everything I usually read. Great write!
    -Christina aka POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting theme for a poem. What I get from it is a parent explaining death to a child very calmly, as if to escape the bluntness that is the reality of things. I found it an odd choice to make the last stanza so big, when it could have been broken into 2 seperate ones.
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]

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