Description: Sometimes, its so tempting to end it all, to leave it all behind... death is so appealing, ending the sorrow of myself and of those around me. I'm standing on the ledge and slowly leaning forward, its only time keeping me from falling.
Giving In -------------------------------------------
Tears keep falling; night keeps calling
Light is fading; no one save me
I don't want to; I won't let you
I refuse to ask for help
I'm not hopeless - just accepting what my future holds
I'm not twisted - I see clearly
I have no options left - my only choice is here
Tears keep falling; darkness calling
Shall I give in; decide my end?
The black sky beckons
My soul begins to answer to the call
But I can't let go, give up my hold
Slip away so silently
Tears keep falling; death keeps calling
Tempting me to close my eyes and let darkness fall
I enjoyed this poem quite a bit . it pulled me back about 10 years to when i felt the same . i agree abouty the 2nd stanza a little off but definilty looking forward to more from you
Oh!!! that is so sad my dear, You should look to life with som other point of view, life is worthy to be lived, for the seek of your parents, your friends and all the ones that loves you. Do not lose hope my dear.... As for your poem is really awesome and I really like the repeition of that part " Tears keep falling; night keeps calling " sounds musical in every line and very powerful too. Great Job...
wow, I love the way it starts out, it sounds like some kind of prayer. The second stanza though seems......uneven, yeah, thats the word. Maybe you should try something like:
"I'm not hopeless - just accepting what my future holds Im not twisted - I can see everything in front of me I have no options left - my only choice is here."
But that was just a suggestion. I really think you did a very good job on this piece. by the way, thanks for reading My swet angel blade. I just put it up and didn't expect no one to read it yet.
JENN!! Don't give in you still have things to live for. Not to mention your love Nate. Even if I have to carry you I will get you past this. I'm sorry I've made nothing better maybe even worse. Please forgive me and let me help you.
very strong poem shows a lot of emotion I hope you know there is always a way out and alwaysd another choice in the poem it seems like your saying you don't see a way out maybe thats not what you meant but anyway [censored] can always get better and it's always as bad as you think I know I had it rough and it all turned around eventually. good write reedo
Submission Name: Giving In
