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    dots Submission Name: here goes nothing...dots

    Author: obscureskies
    ASL Info:    19/F/Fredericton NB
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 11/17/15
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
    Total Views: 876
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotshere goes nothing...dots

    My fingers are slipping
    The surface slick with the fear
    And anguish my body has excreted
    Through my palms
    My grip is loosening
    And soon, soon I will fall.

    The unknown Ė doesnít sound so bad,
    At least I know I wonít know
    What to expect
    And maybe this time will be different
    Maybe, just maybe, my landing will be soft.

    Iíve changed my mind, donít let me fall
    The pitís so dark and Iím still so young
    Will you please give me your hand?
    Or will you look away and say
    ďI canít.Ē
    Iím being weighed down by the fear.

    My fingers are slipping
    One by one, they lose their grasp
    On this so-called reality I thought I knew
    I know now I didnít know.
    I know now you didnít want to know.
    Oh well, here goes nothingÖ

    Submitted on 2006-04-11 14:09:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I feel like you ripped the words right out of my head....how do you capture these things in yur poetry? Its like you can see through everything.
    "The surface slick with the fear
    And anguish my body has excreted"
    you seem to know exactly what causes everything...even if you dont know how it will turn out.... Thank you for this one...I needed it.

    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by sugargirlplur | [ Reply to This ]
      here goes nothing..i think that meant you've let yourself fall?..i know somehow the feeling in this..but i'm not sure it's the same as yours. fear..it's something i felt all through out..but in the end..maybe it's something you let go of...the thought's quite deep.niweiz tkecre!^_^
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]

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