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    dots Submission Name: Renewaldots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Soul renewal kundalini style


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    Tipping the scales;
    stripping,
    Slaying layer
    upon layer.
    Unpeeling;
    reeling in feeling
    Sweet sweat beats
    flames of heat.

    Shedding skin
    in prayers of renewal.
    Sloughing off the rough,
    delivering from doubt,
    turning inside, out.
    Chaos brings order about.

    Shake awake a snake
    Ride an earthquake.

    Take a breath.








    Submitted on 2006-04-11 16:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is fantastic
    I mean really really fantastic
    Youve taken the concept of sheeding the negative and filling it with positive and then took that one step further and wrote about the physical effects of that change
    Very Very Origanel
    I really like this
    Graet Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat! The shedding of snakeskin stayed with me right through this.

    Clever wordplay gives it a lovely rhythm and slows it down in the appropriate places.

    Finding information about kundalnin is hard, there's not much on the net, so I take it you have it in a book? I know they have gurus, and that's about all. This has given me more insight into their beliefs.

    Very well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW!!! that was really intense...I just wow...I have no words...that was one of the best poem i've ever read i really like it...all I can say is WOW
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by Say what? | [ Reply to This ]


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