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    dots Submission Name: Homedots
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    Author: The_Forsaken1
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 18/25/11
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 192
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1030



    Description:
       Im going with through a hard time right now, I dont know how to decribe it so i just put what I feel. I was listining to a song when I wrote this so it has its rythm and a few of its lyrics.


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    dotsHomedots
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    The pain that grips you,
    the fear that binds me,
    releases life within,
    in our mutual shame,
    we hide our eyes,
    from the truth that hides who we are.

    Can't wash it all away
    Cant wish it all away
    cant cry it all away
    cant scratch it all away

    liying beside you,
    listining to you breath
    the Life that flows inside of you burns inside of me,
    cast me not away,
    say you'll be with me
    for i know
    i can not bear it all alone

    cant fight it all away
    cant hope it all away
    cant scream it all away
    it just wont fade away

    cant wash it all away
    cant wish it all away
    cant cry it all away
    cant hope it all away

    cant kill it all a way
    cant laugh it all a way,
    My life will fade a way
    I just cant find a way,
    Make sure the pain that flows inside of you,
    Is replaced by the memories of me.




    Submitted on 2006-04-11 17:55:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I wanted to tell everyone that the title is more of a hidden meaning thing. Think about it anf you might get it.
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by The_Forsaken1 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOAH! wow ok well i really liked it but im not quite sur why u called it home? idk maby im just lame lol keep writing !
    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by kLaDeeDa | [ Reply to This ]
      well i thought it had a good meaning over all... I think it could work as a song... i would have liked to see more detail, like have a face to go with the person so to speak... i liked it though and i am adding it to my favorites... if you change or revise it please let me know!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Mepo | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd have a hard time guessing who this is about, so I'm not going to try. However, This was a very good write. It just has this rhythem that you can almost sing the words too. The pain that screams inside you wish could be silenced... I know the feeling all too well. I'm not sure what song you were listening to. It would be good to know, for a better understanding of the piece. I can't point out any flaws, nothing really jumped out at me as being odd. Good job. Never loose that spark...

    Forever,
    Lilithe
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Lilithe_Aislin | [ Reply to This ]



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