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    dots Submission Name: Deathdots
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    Author: Kelly17
    ASL Info:    25/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 17/8/10
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 435



    Description:
       This is about the death of a friendship


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    dotsDeathdots
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    Pina colada with
    A splash of lime;
    The taste lingers on my tongue.

    He showed me the outside,
    The freedom.

    He corrupted me with fantasies.

    We blew bubbles
    And watched them
    Float away,
    With our memories.

    You said
    Simple words about nothing
    Which meant everything to me.

    God,
    I hate goodbyes.




    Submitted on 2006-04-11 23:20:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes! this was a wonderful poem in these little lines you expressed so much. You showed his impact on you and how your going to miss him so....vented on the memories this was a reallg good short poem.
    -Christina aka POETRY
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      wow small but wonderful.expression complete as i like to say. but words ......... many blanks.

    Pina colada with
    A splash of lime;

    this could have been wriitten better.
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]



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