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    dots Submission Name: Let go and go Legodots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLet go and go Legodots
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    Once a new life
    was birthed out of chaos
    and ordered into a creation.

    An ordered creation
    birthed into a world of chaos.

    Order and chaos
    are one and the same.
    Are you confused
    or do you understand?
    Understanding follows confusion.

    Out of chaos figures are built,
    lego warriors, demons, saviours.
    How did you order your creation?
    What features do you show to the world?
    Inside anxiety invites Chaos
    and she snakes herself awake.

    Do not lie to the world
    with your fear-fashioned lego figure
    she urges.
    Dismantle yourself
    toss your pieces into my void.
    Re order and rebuild
    from a master blueprint.

    Go forth and create chaos
    Transform into order
    new evolved creations.

    Let go
    and go Lego.




    Submitted on 2006-04-12 06:53:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know why some really good pieces don't get the comments but that shouldn't dissuade us!

    This was an interesting title that attracted me & the piece was equally as interesting - like a conundrum!

    A lot of good truths and observations in this piece too and a clever way to try to make rhyme out of reason!

    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I was also attracted by the title, thought it would be a comedy maybe... I've just decided I really like youir poetry because it's very aprt from mundane ramblings, but not so divorced from the mundane to not make sense. And it does make sense, quite a lot actually. Been reading Genesis lately?

    Shana.
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by shana | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i came for the title and stayed for the awesome wording.

    "Order and chaos
    are one and the same.
    Are you confused
    or do you understand?
    Understanding follows confusion."
    i like this part. I think it was nifty the way it contradicted itself but than made sense. (did that make sense? )

    i hope you don't mind, but i'm going to interpret, well, i'll tell you what it makes me think of. Fore warning, i'm REALLY bad at interpreting stuff.

    i kinda got the idea that someone was making these little soldiers to go off and take over the world... maybe i took the words to literally, but thats what it made me think of. Or God, it could be a God thing. I'm not real good with those.

    well, i tried my hand at interpreting... i think i failed... i'll try to improve on that.

    have a loverly day,
    -Kate

    did i mention i loved it? well i do.
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]


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