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    dots Submission Name: Instantaneous Gratificationdots

    Author: ROSHAY9992000
    ASL Info:    22/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 16/12/12
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsInstantaneous Gratificationdots

    I try to run, I try to hide
    But they follow me, the voices inside
    Then after an amputated horizon
    With the drowning to the cement sea floor
    The razor sharp tears, gashing down my face
    Tie a noose and chair it up
    Time to choke my conscience immaculate
    Now looking deep in the mirror
    Only to see the devil's self-portrait
    My inner bruises come forth
    From my own forcefull tribulation
    The infernal beast has swallowed
    My shadows and my soul
    Crucify me for their own contentment
    For my darkest dreams now do unfold
    Sadistically brutal am I
    Constantly maliciousness in my head
    Turns to inevitable mutilation of my soul
    murder, hate, genocide and sin
    Is all summed up as
    Imperfection called oneself

    Submitted on 2006-04-12 09:06:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love all the imagry and metaphors
    It's one of the best pieces I have EVER read!
    IT's creativity like I've never seen before!
    Keep up the AMAZING work!
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by DragonflyKisses | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, how no one note this beautiful yet dark piece. Like I can't even write like this, this was such a beautiful and emotional piece and you could really see your hard work and intelligance go into this.
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beyond me, it was a wondeful blend f intelligence and creativity all to make a beautiful write. Loved it.

    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]

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