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The popular one


Author: Kelly17
ASL Info:    25/f/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 17 /8 /10
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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The popular one



Hair flowing as she walks down the hall;
Confidence shining,
Fake as it may be.
A smile,
Which eludes those who envy her.
And plenty of makeup to cover the flaws.
She acts the part,
Which they need her to play.
An actress of life,
The hope she provides,
Reaches everyone but herself.
As she deals alone,
With the reality of her life.




Submitted on 2006-04-12 13:36:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is cool. kinda made me think about the movie "mean girls" and how lindsay lohan had to act the part and she ended up becoming that person that she hated.
| Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmm, i don't know i mean you put your point across clearly and we know what your talking about but it does need some elaboration.maybe say about she does feel inside that she is struggling with life in reality and maybe doesn't really want to be this admired thing she has to play everyday.
Nice conversational piece
Keep it up
John
| Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
  isn't this the way we all feel? it needs more details, its a little too blah...it has the potental to be good...
| Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]


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