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    dots Submission Name: Cleardots
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    Author: SkullMyHeart
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 18/10/18
    Words: 365
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       its about how i picture the world before.. before every1 started judging others on appearace.. and thats how love is mostly now.. appearence


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    dotsCleardots
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    Clear


    Freedom once had a name
    and once i was safe
    and beauty had a face
    If I'm a discrace, don't blame... me..
    happiness once was alive
    and once i had a big smile size
    but now i feel like im, walking
    in the dark with no light to,
    lead my way..

    [chorus]

    you used to trap me by
    those dazzling eyes
    make me hurt
    and all i ever did was try
    you could have done better
    those words have said so many times
    you should have just known
    of just hiding
    behind this bridge it seems
    theres no cure..
    no love has appeard..


    once i was beside your side
    and in the dark laying
    on the grass
    watching millions of stars
    wishing on the that
    are love would last
    im deciding between
    darkness and light
    my vision getting blurred alright
    im not giving hope
    i missed on so much
    because of you..
    you never felt like this..
    pain in your heart doesnt exist
    you made me feel like no one else
    and thats why i hurt myself..

    [chorus]

    you used to trap me by
    those dazzling eyes
    make me hurt
    and all i ever did was try
    you could have done better
    those words have said so many times
    you should have just known
    of just hiding
    behind this bridge it seems
    theres no cure..
    no love has appeard..


    A stormy night with nowhere to go
    left beside so cold and alone
    cities i see, but they dont want me..
    just another piece of trash...



    you used to trap me by
    those dazzling eyes
    make me hurt
    and all i ever did was try
    you could have done better
    those words have said so many times
    you should have just known
    of just hiding
    behind this bridge it seems
    theres no cure..
    no love has appeard


    -Ellie K.




    Submitted on 2006-04-12 14:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was long, I tried to view it as a song, it did take me places. i liked the ending
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i forgot, these are my Favorite lines...."you made me feel like no one else
    and thats why i hurt myself.."
    they completely stuck in my head.

    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by myonlysalvation | [ Reply to This ]
      this was so good* do you play guitar? write music?? i saw that this has a chorus..i write songs often, i love songs like this, its really creative. wb if you can..i love the picture too.
    xo...Myonlysalvation
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by myonlysalvation | [ Reply to This ]


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