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    dots Submission Name: Warped and Twisteddots
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    Author: XvolcomXgirlX
    ASL Info:    14/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 5/1/1
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1202
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 907



    Description:
       IM NOT SKITTLES FROM THAT OTHER WEBSIGHT!!!!!
    THIS IS SOMEONE ELSES WRITING AND I DONT DESERVE ANY CREDIT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THE REAL POET IS SKITTLES NOT ME!!!!!!!!!!!


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    dotsWarped and Twisteddots
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    Harsh words & violent blows
    Hidden secrets nobody knows
    Eyes are open, hands are fisted
    Deep inside I'm warped & twisted
    So many tricks & so many lies
    Too many whens & too many whys
    Nobody's special, nobody's gifted
    I'm just me, warped & twisted
    Sleeping awake & choking on a dream
    Listening loudly to a silent scream
    Call my mind, the number's unlisted
    Lost in someone so warped & twisted
    On my knees, alive but dead
    Look at the invisible blood I've bled
    I'm not gone, my mind has drifted
    Don't expect much, I'm warped & twisted
    Burnt out, wasted, empty, & hollow
    Today's just yesterday's tomorrow
    The sun died out, the ashes sifted
    I'm still here, warped & twisted




    Submitted on 2006-04-12 19:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really good piece, i checked the link that Robert Neville porvided us and yes this poem was posted in another site under Skittles so unless you are Skittles you cannot post someone else work without giving the proper credit.

    Uhh I dont Know,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good but i have read it somewhere else and unless you are skittles, its a fake! http://www.netpoets.com/poems/depress/1452001.htm check out this link
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by Robert Neville | [ Reply to This ]
      well i have to agree with raineces on this one its a nice poem and i think u should write more like this more tragic ones get the blood flowin let everyone know wut ur feelings are like
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by emptyness | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it very much! Not just that I can perfectly relate to it; it's nicely written and the thoughts are organized. I'm adding it to my faves. Nice description, warped and twisted. The rhyming and flow's pretty. I love every line, can't find a favorite..hmm,the last three lines, I like!^_^take care!
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good I Thank You for sharing this with us
    However
    I do hope to see some origanel work from you
    God Bless
    Ron


    By the way I live In Redondo Beach isnt California great

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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