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    dots Submission Name: Just Friends...dots
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    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       When friends become more....


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    dotsJust Friends...dots
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    You were never afraid
    to let me see you cry,
    and I always told you the truth
    over hour long conversations.

    We would play the question game
    “Where do you want to live?”
    and I would laugh and say
    with you.

    True friends
    With every word
    I knew this was the real thing.

    You bought me a present
    on Halloween
    and signed it
    LOVE

    But it was platonic,
    at least to you.
    One of the guys
    you used to say.

    My feelings were different,
    and when your name
    showed on my caller id
    I smiled
    because this was my time
    with you.

    Your girlfriends
    came and went
    but I was constant,
    and so were you.

    I told you I loved you
    in February
    when I was at your house.

    You looked me in the eye
    and said I love you too
    but I knew not the way I did.



    Then Easter
    you handed me a card
    with seven words.
    “I love you too
    the same way.”






    Submitted on 2006-04-13 01:33:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi,
    This is a nice write. Shows how a friendship can lead to something else. The only thing I have to say on the negative is the stanza grouping and some punctuations. I'm not good in the punctuation department. I need a refresher course. Hopefully someone will be nice enough to help you. Other than that, it was a good piece expressing how you feel. Very passionate. take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there, This is a nice piece here...I mean a smile just escaped my lips when I finished with the piece...Laudable job here...It certainly is going to my favourites..I know the feelings..Its as if you're walking on egg shells...And if it aint reciprocated the way you wanna..It becomes a huge ugly mess altogether....But I'm glad for you the turn of events were wonderful...Keep writing...This one's going to my favourites.U know why? Today being "Good Friday" I'm workin...Sad I know...So just when I was feeling sorry 4 myself..Your piece here just lifted me up...Thanks.... :D
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by jyots | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this was a wonderful write. this was a happy way of how best friend/ boyfriend relationships usually work out. I mean I fell in love with my best friend who was a guy and I mena we were exactly what you too were ecxept he didnt love me like that. Being in that situation really does suck. Becasue I let my love get in the way we are no longer even friends. Sad huh? Well I am gld things worked out for you and him.

    "Then Easter
    you handed me a card
    with seven words.
    "I love you too,
    the same way."

    This wzas my favorite part because it was like one of those fairy tale endings at least to me it was. Great write.
    -Christina aka POETRY

    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]


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