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    dots Submission Name: Silent deathdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
        --- (sitting inside a computer lab.)


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    dotsSilent deathdots
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    Work that i find all around
    Colors of many dots to be found
    Touch and perform actions like nothing
    Making the life null to be bound.

    Depends on the mind on how much it takes
    Go on in life the hard work and mistakes
    Drones too many in this life so fake
    Yet the life the death of a snake.

    Silence that is found in the air in the sound
    Fear that addict and addict will i get
    Makes the life depend on it and yet
    The trilogy of life wasted to forget.

    Made are so many the roots of a tree
    Branches are we roots to hold
    Fallen have we to these roots of lines
    Data as we call them free or sold.

    Cold in the clarity of these so beautiful
    Eyes to cry for them so painful
    Wonder that we can in this world of machines
    The computer so useful the end of hell.




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      we slither through life hoping that our mind will stay alive even as we accomplish day to day menial tasks....

    the poet's mind allows him or her to rise above the mundane with some purpose...
    to go outside the box...to have a working mind while the hands are may be working at a menial task..

    i like how these lines are put together..the momentum is at the end of each line..a crescendo built...rather than the emphasis falling off as we reach the last word...

    twisted and good

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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