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    dots Submission Name: the funnist timesdots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 438
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       just a wonder lol its kinda how i like my weekends and thats how my weekends are


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    I have a good girl to miss until the weekend
    Reading all the messages she does send
    Once the weekend is here
    We both are always near
    Walking around my tailor park
    Until the night creeps up and all is dark
    Back to my house to go hang out
    Turn up the radio so they canít hear her shout
    Lights out we lay in bed
    But still nothing but moans have been said
    At this timer it feels so right
    God I didnít believe she was that tight
    The love that we did share
    Each and every night i'm there
    Soft kiss and gentile touch
    God I think she is so much
    The full moon in the sky
    This love will never die
    The nights and days we spend
    The messages my brain starts to send
    Thoughts of what just happened running through my head
    Sweat still dripping off my body on to my bed
    Trying to catch our breath as we lay
    Take a look out the window the sun has rose
    I guess another night with out sleep I suppose
    Take a shower then go out side
    Walk her home then she lies
    Ex boyfriends wanting to beat my ass
    But to that all I do is sit back and laugh
    For every night is the same
    This felling could never get lame
    Sure she might not be my girlfriend
    But I cant help it I donít want those nights to end
    Back at my place I wait
    And I know Iím deceiving fate
    I start to bandage up my cuts
    Most people think Iím nuts
    The bite marks feel so good
    Just how I hoped it would
    A knock at my door
    Its her and back to my bedroom for more
    She comes running in and jumps on me
    God Iím glad that I get to see
    Clothing gets ripped to the floor
    I already having her scream for more
    Her nails in my back and her teeth in my neck
    All over my house its nothing but a wreck
    If only people could know
    Then our true affection could show
    The marks left all over us
    People have to know something they must
    Iím feeling great as she screams my name
    But you see I donít do it for the fame
    Marks all over my body and the sweat starts to fall
    I love the weekend I have such a ball






    Submitted on 2006-04-13 11:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oooo good write, now i'm horny, ur evil lol. u said a reference to ballz twice and I hoped it would be less innocent but all in all I guess this write was a fair call at not being innocent. good write, lots of passion, kinda ammused me for some reason, there goes my stoner sense of humor. keep writing 'em.
    -jess
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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