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    dots Submission Name: Smoking Picturedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is about a weird picture I took of my friend Tina smoking.


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    dotsSmoking Picturedots
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    I took a picture of you
    smoking a cigarette on the patio.
    You looked as though
    you were about to levitate
    balancing your weight on your toes.
    The puff of smoke around your head
    hung like an omen
    and your face was like a painting
    of a sage in nirvana.





    Submitted on 2004-05-07 03:07:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      simple and to the point.. you've taken a tiny moment in time and framed it twice... once in the photograph and once here. it makes me curious to see what the picture looked like.
    i love poetry like this.. taking seemingly insignificant moments and making it monumental. and yet keeping it subtle the whole time.
    looking forward to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      a great description. sometimes just little things can inspire us. I especially liked the 'sage of nirvana'. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice piece. the description is clear & the picture it paints is vivid. good work! :)
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice description of a still frame. 'Sage in nirvana' was a nice touch.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      As always - not too many words, but used perfectly, nice, constructive form, pleasant style, you name things in a fantastic way. All your poems are very similar, well, they describe you somehow, so they must have something in common, but how about trying new horizons? How about experimenting a bit?
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]


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