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    dots Submission Name: Mastering Timedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMastering Timedots
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    The hour glassís sand filters through my hand,
    I control all of time and where it might land.
    The sands shifting upon my shoulders weighing me down,
    Laying on the floor I look up hosting a frown.
    I canít beat father time,
    Iíll just spend the rest of time talking in rhyme.
    People staring at me oddly,
    As the sand covers the rest of my body.
    I was to weak unable to stand,
    Now I am a sand grain filtering through anotherís hand.




    Submitted on 2004-01-21 23:03:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very interesting.My visual effect from it was a deep moment of a universal magician with something to prove, all revolving around time.Sort of like the essence of a street performer at mastering miracles.
    My only problem of opinion is that I wish it could have been longer but still ever so worth the read.
    | Posted on 2011-01-26 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      intresting peice, i'll read it again later when i've had more sleep, but this is intresting none the less
    | Posted on 2004-01-22 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]


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