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    dots Submission Name: The Control Of Illuminationdots
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    Author: Incisive
    ASL Info:    19/M/Houston/TX
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3/0/2
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 103
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1590



    Description:
       This about finally controling my life, and being free of the expectaitons of other people. Even though it's a struggle either way.


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    dotsThe Control Of Illuminationdots
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    Finally, something to grab on to.
    This candle to a dying wish
    Was lit with the touch of this.
    Illuminating a hand to hold,
    A hand away from a journey’s bitch.

    The candle wax melting slowly
    Gave me a reason to be aware.
    Gave me a scare, a reason to care,
    Yet, I do not remove my hand.

    Let emphasis be the pain.

    Emphasis is my life, don’t you see,
    Looked at through a magnifying glass.
    Overwhelmed did I stay, first and last.
    Expectations scorched from light
    Aimed through an overexposed lens.

    So, I hid in the shadows.

    But this light, this dimmer sight,
    Means more to me than expectations,
    For it’s small you see, this illumination.
    Something I can control,
    Something to call my own.

    Oh, what a feeling to behold.

    I mold the wax,
    I make it to what I see.
    My definition of what a journey should be.
    Although, it’s troubling,
    Because fire makes the candle
    Melt into comformity.

    The fire burns but it seems indifferent.
    It is what it is.
    It is heaven sent,
    Or what I would imagine it to be.

    To be exact, what I want it to be.

    As it slowly melts away,
    And my burning hand molds day by day,
    There is nothing more than this.
    Nothing more than control,
    Control of illumination.
    The illumination away from the emphasis
    Getting bigger everyday.




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      I've read one similar write but u guys seem alot alike so that doesn't take away from this one in my opinion. I completely loved what you were saying here and I love the way that you expressed it. I really don't think I have anything negative to say about this one, I enjoyed this one throughout the entire write...it was a bit long but it kept attention and your imagry was so easy to connect to but still gave a nice picture. peace
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe you are writing of a person needs to experience some form of pain to experience happiness
    In a way I believe this to be true
    The human mind has a way of always wanting a battle to get itself out of
    I call it the Relief Pitcher Syndrome
    You did very good with this one
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron
    And also let me be one of the first to welcome you to Elite Skills
    I hope this site brings you all the joy it has brought me


    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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