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    dots Submission Name: Past-Present-Future?dots
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    Author: rtx2
    Elite Ratio:    1.46 - 7/2/4
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPast-Present-Future?dots
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    Locked in a prison of my thoughts
    Each memory passes,
    like a series of robotic guards.
    Each pausing only long enough
    to ensure I see they are there.
    Then moving on.
    But my eye is drawn to one repeatedly
    I bask in the feeling that lingers
    It sooths my mind
    and yet, there is a quickening
    an expectation of things to come.
    I see the past and future merging
    It becomes the thing we call present
    Because if we live it fully
    It truly is a gift.




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 05:00:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The choice of subject is good, however I think it would be improved if the subject was more elaborated. It just lightly touches on each passage of time not really lingering on any one time. Perhaps you just wanted it to melt into one seemless thought though.
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]



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