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    dots Submission Name: Cheesy Line (maybe two lines)dots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Comedy
    Total Views: 531
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 184



    Description:
       CHEESY STUFF lol


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    dotsCheesy Line (maybe two lines)dots
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    If I was a rainforest and you were gone, I would just be a regular forest.

    It's like if I was the desert and you were the rain, I mourn until the day you come back.




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 06:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one is interesting. It express a unique kind of way of how one person needs another. The first quote is saying that this person adds quality and character to you and your life and without them you are just an ordinary person without that special something in life. The second quote got me to thinking and I think you could improve on this one a little with the word "mourn". Perhaps to say 'wither' or something more along the lines of the dryness of the desert. I like wither personally but that is up to you. Mourn to me reminds me of crying and that would be a reference to water, and the desert is very hot and dry. Just something to consider. And how the hell are ya anyway??

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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