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    dots Submission Name: My Revengedots
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    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Angry
    Total Views: 1307
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 663



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       Well the start is a litte harsh but just keep reading


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    dotsMy Revengedots
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    Maches
    Light the maches
    Burn
    Burn the people
    Let them burn
    The hypocrites
    The monsters
    The people
    Suffer
    Let them suffer
    Not for me
    But for the ones you've hurt
    The hearts you've broken
    The minds you've hypnotized
    The scars you left
    The junk you've spread
    Just spread it all
    I don't care
    Cause one day ill laugh at it all
    Right in your crying faces
    But then my fun will end
    Cause my heart is not as hard as yours
    I feel sorry
    I help you up
    My revenge is over




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 11:26:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't like most poems about negative emotion, but this one was great. It qualifies in my book as an excellent poem. It reads well, the structure, the organization, word choice and content is powerful, and it has its own music--however creepy/angry music it is. I love how it starts and I love how it ends. This one is awesome.

    It's one of those that I could sit and read over and over again until I fall asleep I should seriosuly copy all your poems down somewhere. And read them over and over, until I fall asleep
    | Posted on 2010-09-24 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
      to be human is to feel empathy, to admit remorse after brutality is even more so. oh homicidal little would u actually do so it is to wonder.
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes I feel like this too. It's nice to find an outlet, right? However, the poems I write in this kind of mood should be buried six feet under and never seen again.

    I like how this poem all seems to come rushing out, an outpour of rage and righteous vengeance, and then at the end you collect yourself and help them up. This is an excellent rant-write, if not more than that.
    | Posted on 2008-12-01 00:00:00 | by liquid | [ Reply to This ]
      Ay yo i love dis poem.
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i can't really say much i enjoyed reading it and i deffently love the begining...the fire oh the fire. unfortanally iam kinda a heartless [censored] and [censored] if they desearve they deserve i'll even kick while there down but anyway i liked it good write -jess-
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that was a random thought, can't really call it a poem. so yeah, that was a lot like a song a wrote, it's not on here, but it was really like this. The chorus was like this,
    "I hate you
    I wanna hurt you
    I wanna make you cry.
    I wanna see blood drip down
    I wanna see you die."

    So yeah, you could see i was pissed off. the only difference is the person i was mad at, i didn't say i was going to help him up. so, yeah, im done here.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      Ill bring my chainsawwWWWw
    and then we can chill...
    this was awsomely full of hatred in the beginning but that is sooooooooooo you to feel sorry for someone after everything
    thats good yo i got that problem tooo

    Queen Darknesssssssss of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      BURN SUCKAHHHH BURNN
    I love the eNdInGGg

    "But then my fun will end
    Cause my heart is not as hard as yours
    I feel sorry
    I help you up
    My revenge is over "

    I had to comment twice cuz it was sooo effen awsome(:

    YEBO yoh yoh yoh...... is nahhhh

    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the matches part
    and the thing about at the end you will finall get sorry and help them up






    uthmaan
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]
      I think about revenge all the time for all those that peaople have hurt and it sticks in the back of my mind because I don't have the heart to be as cruel as they were. (All those that discriminate . . . . this is for you.) Never lose hope. They will all get what they deserve. Sometimes I even feel sorry for them for not knowing their own fate. I can't even stand the thought of anybody being hurt... no matter how much of a champion they were..... later z

    Unperfect

    wow this one was pretty long
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      By the way . . . . My brother said that you are like majorly weird, and he said that he got the stuff.

    Peace.

    Unperfect
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]


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