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    dots Submission Name: High Schooldots
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    Author: BlueHeart
    ASL Info:    14/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 14/24/19
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Misc/Society
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       High School is just like a pack of savage animals in the jungle.


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    dotsHigh Schooldots
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    In this place where I live, there are many different cultures in the same environment. Even though we all live here, I am unknown to many of them.

    In this environment food is scarce. All of the tribes, that have different cultures, eat the same food as everyone else(with the exception of tribe members that fend for themselves.) The time of day when all tribes eat can be the most dangerous. Not because food is scarce, but because of the tribes' difference
    in culture. At this time battles can break out , possible even leading to wars. These wars are phenomenal, but most tribes just stay neutral. but as all wars they must come to an end. Many tribes make alliances during, after, and before these wars and soon there are only two sides. These alliances stand strong, and when a war breaks out, they are thorughly prepared. The strange thing about these wars is that no-one dies. Well, at least no flesh is torn, but souls perish.

    The endless fault of the war of the ages continues every moon. But, perhaps, the most important factor in this place is knowing who your friends are, and who your enemies are. Betrayal and Sabotage are two of the most crucial facotes of how you fight the war. At any moment, your most trusted allie can become your worst enemy. This is where I live, this is High School.




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      *tap* That's your hammer hitting the nail on the head. You seem to have a very clear worldview. The same is true of my (old) school; discrimination runs rampant. Granted, I live in the middle of Hicksville, but it was the same situation when I lived in D.C. Hunters become the hunted overnight; alliances can be made, treaties forged and broken over a simple border skirmish. Well, I'll stop piggybacking on your idea now. Twas a good write.

    M.S.
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]
      I know where you're coming from. In my school, granted I come from a small town, you either join a group or fall victim to it. No one is exactly safe, and everyone is a target. And the most trusted allie part, yeah, I know that one. Being a girl means I see a lot more of that. You can be the best friend to someone for years, and then find out that she's hated you the whole time.

    I guess the only thing for us is to hope that someday, in the real world, we'll be able to break free of the chains of cliques and sterotypes. Fake will be found, and real will be trusted. But for now...we just have to make it through. We have to find a way to just...live.

    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi
    My Friend this is very good
    You captured the essence of High School life perfectly
    I felt as if I was back in my High School again reading this
    Excellent Job
    Good Use of Words
    And let me be one of the first to welcome you to Elite Skills
    I hope this site brings you all the joy it has brought to me
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you are talking about so well in this write, it seems like it's almost always that way, black and white you are either one or the other no middle ground. what's even worse is tht in alot of ways this stupid behavior carries itself through the person/people's adult lives. anyway good point, it was a little hard to follow with the lack of organized format and might be more like random thought but overall this was kinda thought provoking.
    keep writing,
    jess
    | Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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