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    dots Submission Name: Paper Roses -Reviseddots
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    Author: Clayton
    ASL Info:    55/Country Boy/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 880/809/193
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 459
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    Bytes: 800



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    dotsPaper Roses -Reviseddots
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    Paper Roses she left them by the stairs,
    Dampened by her tears as they stood.
    Forcing on adulthood, death seems so cruel,
    Claiming a loving father, known for his good.

    Paper Roses made of tissues taken from a box,
    While crying beside the visitation stand.
    Twisted just like he showed her just the other day,
    Alone they cried as they held each others hand.

    Paper Roses, so fragile when tears fall,
    And they collect too many for their size.
    He ask if she might scatter them around him,
    And place one in his hand by his side

    Knowing that he might need them,
    While watching daily with his love,
    Paper Roses will help dry the tears,
    That he’d be crying from up above.




    Submitted on 2004-05-07 08:20:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is such a lovely poem. A very sad poem about the death of a father but very lovely and even comforting. These paper roses really add a lot of meaning and character to this poem. I lost my dad when I was only 4 years old so anytime I read something about the death of a parent I can surely relate and must comment. You really show your sensitive side in this poem. I have gotten used to your happy and humorous poems that I dont think I get to see this side too often. This is indeed beautiful. Great job with this one my friend! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      bueatiful..even better revised.I truly thought it was perfect before but u proved me wrong. by the way the bad comment u gave me that u asked about a few weeks ago was toward several poets in general that u wrote in my normal comment area . i erased it because u pissed me off...but thats over...u should just try to help people give suggestions..instead of insults.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that is a really powerful poem... the Paper Flowers iamge is awesome, kinda reminds of... I think there was little boiy who was dying and he made a thousand paper cranes or something like that... rating: Great Job!... +fav because I dunno I like the images or something. It didn't WOAH me, though.
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so powerful and sad I really enjoyed reading this it was very heartfelt good job
    | Posted on 2004-05-07 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the power in this poem. The words were heartfelt. It was quite sad.. infact i'm crying as i write this.. great write
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by danflor4 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the revision :) A beautiful read, quite poignant and insightful into the crossing over between childhood and adulthood - the realisation and impact of death. Well done :)
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]



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