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Author: iluvpoetry_1
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hey this is one my friend suheil and me wrote! my name is akaila if u didnt figure that out! and u pronounce it Akayla! like that short A sound got it! good!! it means Hawaiin Goddess!
~akaila~


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Suheil: You say that we dont belong.
You say that we are now long done


Akaila: You say that we can never be, never again be able to feel the blazing passion that there used to be.

Suheil: You say that I dont belong in your soul. You say that I am like a snowflake fallin in the desert. Me, the snowflake you the desert.

Akaila: Why can't you just trust me and kiss my lips one more time. I love you and I need you in my life!




Submitted on 2006-04-14 16:39:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah this wasn't really good at all. is this person a guy cuz we all know u swing both ways. lol. this person really likes the snowflake imagery don't they
| Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm, something like we did! Can relate to silent_death though no emotions, poem felt flat! Hope your not mad of my honesty, peace & stay safe...
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  This wasn't all that poetic:P there was imagry and stuff but the wording was kinda just blahish. The emtion was there but for some reason this almost ammused me, I dunno I just feel kinda stoned, I'm lmao at everything tonite. good write...now go be happy or somethin' .
peace
| Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the xexy you put to play - it is the thing of beings - thata makes a girl pause and give in -nice-
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]


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