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    dots Submission Name: A Home of Our Owndots
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    Author: franksinatra
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 13/9/14
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Happy memories.


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    dotsA Home of Our Owndots
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    She never really liked her face
    She had a hairlip (slightly)
    So when she talked she'd raise her hand
    And cover it, politely.

    She never really liked her looks
    Her hips were "just too wide,"
    She shuddered when she saw her clothes
    hang limply at her sides.

    I loved her looks, I loved her lips,
    I called her my sweet rabbit
    She blushed at that, but learned to laugh
    For laughing was her habit.

    I longed to buy her pretty things
    To wrap around her wrist
    Or soft, thin clothes of deep, rich hues
    To wrap around her waist.

    "No- I'll stick with my linen dress,
    We'll buy a house instead."
    She always wanted a garden
    To plant and feed and tread.

    We found a house that met our needs
    On 12 Waverly Street
    We lived and loved for many years
    To the tramp of children's feet.

    Ah Ruth, my love, you were to me
    The greatest of all the beauties
    Ah, Ruth, my love, I cannot be,
    Without you laughing, happily.




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 17:09:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OOh!! That's soo sweet! Its absolutely beautiful just as it is! I can't think of a single thing I'd change. Its soo sweet to see someone look back on their life and reflect on the beauty of someone close to them! This is absolutely wonderful! Keep it up! :)
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Siberianhearts | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the story behind this. I can really tell this topic mean't alot to you. These days people will just write about how much they hate themselves and how they are drifting into insanity or something like that. It is nice to read about something different. You seemed very inspired and it's hard to find the words to describe. I guess what i mean is, it is a very honest and deep writing. I enjoyed this very much.

    Jan : )
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful love story! Something that is very hard to find in here. Living your life with someone for years and still find them the most beautiful person in the world regardless of their flaws.
    Loving this person years later even more than one loved them in the beginning.
    Fantastic!
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Then again, I don't think I'd be brave enough to comment if I didnt.
    It's easy enough to relate to, from Ruth's perspective, for most people. And the speaker is still another half- the one that doesn't see the faults, or sees them in a different light.
    Ruth reminds me of my Dad, in a way. Mom always wants to get him little trinkets and take him out to eat, but he always says 'Oh, no. Save the money for when we really need it." That's wise of him, of course, but it makes one sort of sad. And it doesn't stop Mom from buying the toys.
    Okay, enough personal story. I liked how..well, all of it. It's personable without being sloppy. ^_^

    ~Birdie~
    | Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]


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