I read this poem and adored it from the title alone after reading it i can definately say i love it entirely. its poems like these that make me hate the fact you stopped writing. so much raw emotion and twists and turns to keep the reader on the edge. you really should start writing again because its peices like these that paint so vivid a picture that your emotions get shown and shared.
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You know that is true that we hid behind a mask, whether it be not to let anyone in so we don't get hurt, or so that they can't see what is truly there. Nothingness.... A life wasted so, we just hid, always running from things we are afraid of. And I'm for one am tired of it.
omg so beyond true.... sounds like scotts ego hit you full frontal though.... so now i know how he thinks, if i could only know how he feels i'd be good. good write, email him it! i think he needs to read something along these lines!
Its very true, we all hold up our true selves behind masks. A mask to protect us from the world, and from ourselves. A way to keep us from pain, guilt, anger... Any imperfections that can be cast upon us... All of it pushed under the hollow skin of a mask we wear. This fact is beyond true. I love how though simple it gets the point accross perfectly I do however have a few minor changes I would make to this poem.
I feel only joy I never feel pain I never do anything wrong So Iím never to blame.
if you remove the word anything it not only flows better but also still works perfectly
Iíve made no bad choices Iíve done everything right I could slaughter 1 million people And still sleep at night.
the line i could slaughter 1 million people is too long maybe changing it to i could slaughter millions... it would get the point accross still make sense and again flow alot easier
I have no secrets But I hide behind a mask Weíre all perfect arenít we Until you look behind the tainted glass.
if you take out the until you look behind part i find it suits just as well as with it but again it seems to flow more easily. it will also ease back into the seren simplicity of your poem. then again its your own work feel free to ignore all suggestions i've made