Break up or a death? I'm interested in that because it could go either way. This was a nice poem...it could use some work in ares...try breaking it up into different stanzas...it'll help to reader get the flow of it better...at least it would for me.
Some things just aren't meant to last. I think, what I got at least, was that your realtionship suddenly ended. I'm sorry for that. And your poem was nice. It was slightly confusing, but other then that it was good. The imagery was there, though cleaner stanzas could have helped in the delivery. But, overall it got the point across, so...Nice poem! Cheers, ~Persephone~
This was really nice. Sometimes we lose what we think are the best things in life but only to find something better. (i dont know whats going to happen we find that one thing beyond which there is nothing better then i guess we're screwed, it's funny life has a way of doing that),