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    dots Submission Name: The Last Break Up Songdots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 264
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1098



    Description:
       This is a song I wrote recently. Tell me what you think.

    Edit: This was updated on April 12th, 2008. I re-wrote this the other night, so previous comments are to the previous version.


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    dotsThe Last Break Up Songdots
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    Verse 1:
    I'm so sick of writing my "last" goodbyes
    I've already said them countless times.
    I swear this will be the last time it's said
    No more will be said, sung, or read.

    Chorus:
    This is the last break up song
    I'm finally letting myself move on
    I know that I did nothing wrong
    It's been over for far too long.

    Verse 2:
    I've taken you back after you cheated
    Allowed my trust to be resurrected.
    Even after you've lied and lied
    Too many "second chances" tried.

    (Chorus)

    Bridge:
    Maybe you're not hearing me
    You've done nothing but hurt me
    I locked you out of my heart
    Now I'm throwing away the key.

    (Chorus)

    Verse 3:
    This is truly the last goodbye
    You'll never again make me cry.
    I never wanna hear "I'm sorry"
    No more guilt, no more pain, no more fury.

    (Chorus x2)




    Submitted on 2006-04-14 18:48:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have a lot of verses...and they're really short...try combing two verses each to make a single verse...get what I'm saying? It would make it work better...try concocting a bridge in there too, that would make it loads of radical sweetness haha!

    Pretty good...hoping to see more,


    *Toxic*
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      lol your emo too awwwww does the emo child want a muffin and a razor blade *hand you the muffin* no razor blades for you my friend! anyways awwww... ct?
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Dead_alive | [ Reply to This ]



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