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    dots Submission Name: The Last Break Up Songdots

    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       This is a song I wrote recently. Tell me what you think.

    Edit: This was updated on April 12th, 2008. I re-wrote this the other night, so previous comments are to the previous version.

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    dotsThe Last Break Up Songdots

    Verse 1:
    I'm so sick of writing my "last" goodbyes
    I've already said them countless times.
    I swear this will be the last time it's said
    No more will be said, sung, or read.

    This is the last break up song
    I'm finally letting myself move on
    I know that I did nothing wrong
    It's been over for far too long.

    Verse 2:
    I've taken you back after you cheated
    Allowed my trust to be resurrected.
    Even after you've lied and lied
    Too many "second chances" tried.


    Maybe you're not hearing me
    You've done nothing but hurt me
    I locked you out of my heart
    Now I'm throwing away the key.


    Verse 3:
    This is truly the last goodbye
    You'll never again make me cry.
    I never wanna hear "I'm sorry"
    No more guilt, no more pain, no more fury.

    (Chorus x2)

    Submitted on 2006-04-14 18:48:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have a lot of verses...and they're really short...try combing two verses each to make a single verse...get what I'm saying? It would make it work better...try concocting a bridge in there too, that would make it loads of radical sweetness haha!

    Pretty good...hoping to see more,

    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      lol your emo too awwwww does the emo child want a muffin and a razor blade *hand you the muffin* no razor blades for you my friend! anyways awwww... ct?
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Dead_alive | [ Reply to This ]

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